Poem and potention next song:  UTMOST COMPLETION written and copyrighted by Anna Marie Isgro

Lord, Your unfailing Love has overwhelmed me.
Your forgiveness surely cleans whiter than snow.
Oh, for a thousand tongues to praise You!
To stop thanking You I'll never know.

When in the deepest pit I was
Where little lambs should never be,
Your hand came down and grabbed me out
To keep me for all eternity.

Your Mercy, Oh Lord, is sweeter than kisses.
So secure are Your arms around me.
To let me know that I'm still Yours
Forever, I'll ever be.

For all the love songs that poets have written,
And every word of them true,
Still no one has described such utmost completion
In Your Love when I worship You.

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Good morning, Ms. Anna, please send me the copyright information on this poem. My e-mail address is revmjf1@yahoo.com. I looked at the poem and chords for this came to me in about 20 minutes.

As I read this I get right away the strong emotion and deep conviction that inspired it.  I am interested in hearing the song that develops out of it.  I think it will be important to identify what part of it will be the chorus - perhaps a new section that includes "Utmost Completion", whereby the current sections become verses and a bridge.  

All of the words used are "singable" so I think it should develop nicely.

Some things to consider, and please do not take this as me being overly critical.  Since this is a "give and get feedback" thread, I assume that you are asking for any thoughts that may make your poem-song better:

In section 1, I am not sure that "forgiveness" is what cleans us.  Perhaps "grace" or "sacrifice" would make more sense, or some other act of Christ that renders the effect of cleansing and forgiving.  I also get confused in the last line:  "To stop thanking You I'll never know"   That loses me, and I don't know what you mean.  I don't know what it is that "you'll never know" and why you say it at that point in the verse.

And now a thought I will give to any and all who ask and receive feedback on their song(s):  Please give as good as you get.  Make sure you take the time to give feedback on someone else's song.  It doesn't have to be much - just listen to the song posted for feedback by someone else sometime, and offer back a few thoughts about the song: melody, lyrics, chords, etc., or even just your overall feeling about the song.  

Thank you, Brian for your critique. "To stop thanking You I'll never know" means I'm never going to stop thanking Him. Thus I'm never going to know what it's like to stop thanking Him. Also, if you think about forgiveness another way, would you be cleansed if Christ didn't forgive you?

Regarding the "To stop thanking You I'll never know" - I think it would be better to find a way to make that more easily understandable.  Is there a way to reword that?  Perhaps.

Regarding forgiveness, I appreciate the intent of what you are trying to say.  However, I do not think it is necessarily Biblical or theologically accurate to say that forgiveness has cleansed me.   I wouldn't be cleansed if Jesus did not die for me.  I receive His gift of grace and have had my sins forgiven through faith in Him and His saving act.  I am cleansed and forgiven because of Jesus, but I don't think it is accurate to say that forgiveness has cleansed me.  I wonder what others think on this line.  


Anna said:

Thank you, Brian for your critique. "To stop thanking You I'll never know" means I'm never going to stop thanking Him. Thus I'm never going to know what it's like to stop thanking Him. Also, if you think about forgiveness another way, would you be cleansed if Christ didn't forgive you?
Brian, Jesus told the Pharisees that their blasphemy against the Holy Spirit will never be forgiven in this life or the next. Are they cleaned just because Christ died for them? He died for everybody.
Refrain:
And it is finished! Your utmost completion.
You became my curse to set me free.
And it is finished. Such utmost completion
is Your love when You died for me.

Or the last line should read, "Is Your great love when You died for me."

Anna said:

Refrain:
And it is finished! Your utmost completion.
You became my curse to set me free.
And it is finished. Such utmost completion
is Your love when You died for me.

Your question about the Pharisee blasphemy of the Holy Spirit and them never being forgiven takes us off track.  We need to consider the basic truths from Scripture that apply to you and what you are saying in your poem: You are forgiven - You are cleansed - What makes that possible? You have received the cleansing and forgiveness by grace through faith - but none of that is possible without the sacrificial act which pays the penalty for your sins.  So in your poem, I just do not think it is theologically accurate to say that forgiveness is what cleanses.  This would be a fairly easy change to make in that line, but the decision is yours on how you are going to word your poem / lyric.


Anna said:

Brian, Jesus told the Pharisees that their blasphemy against the Holy Spirit will never be forgiven in this life or the next. Are they cleaned just because Christ died for them? He died for everybody.
It's not off-track at all. It's Scripture. You're avoiding the possibility that I'm right just because I'm a woman. I'm not changing my words. The Holy Spirit gave them to me as is. I did not concoct this poem from my mind. I obeyed the Spirit of God in me, not man's concocted theology that they only let men study and become priests or preachers.

I certainly accept the possibility that I am right and that you are wrong.  I thought the Pharisee part was not heading our discussion in the most beneficial direction.   Based on your response, however, I think that concludes my feedback on your work.  Everything I wrote so far was meant only to help you make your poem the best it can be.  Best wishes.

Anna said:

It's not off-track at all. It's Scripture. You're avoiding the possibility that I'm right just because I'm a woman. I'm not changing my words. The Holy Spirit gave them to me as is. I did not concoct this poem from my mind. I obeyed the Spirit of God in me, not man's concocted theology that they only let men study and become priests or preachers.

I accept the possibility that I'm right and you're wrong.

Brian Lawson said:

I certainly accept the possibility that I am right and that you are wrong.  I thought the Pharisee part was not heading our discussion in the most beneficial direction.   Based on your response, however, I think that concludes my feedback on your work.  Everything I wrote so far was meant only to help you make your poem the best it can be.  Best wishes.

Anna said:

It's not off-track at all. It's Scripture. You're avoiding the possibility that I'm right just because I'm a woman. I'm not changing my words. The Holy Spirit gave them to me as is. I did not concoct this poem from my mind. I obeyed the Spirit of God in me, not man's concocted theology that they only let men study and become priests or preachers.
I am amazed at my typing mistake and I apologize for the error above. What I meant to say above is that I realize and acknowledge that you may be entirely right and that I may be entirely wrong about the theological matter in your poem. But that's how this thread has gone. Now to stop my participation entirely on this thread.

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