Worship You Forever - Feedback please. Thanks.

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Permalink Reply by Jem on January 10, 2010 at 12:50am

Hi Matt,
This beautiful, I love the music, great.
The lyrics are very good, tune too. But as you said the bridge is a bit rushed, maybe take a few words out, or change the tune for the last two lines, I hope I'm not being too harsh. :-)
Well done.
Jem

Permalink Reply by Matt Allison on January 10, 2010 at 3:00pm

Thanks, no one's ever told me my musical is beautiful before. I really appreciate it. Yes, looks like I still need to work on the bridge.

cheers

Matt

Permalink Reply by Rachel Stevenson on January 10, 2010 at 6:17pm

Hey Matt!
This song really blessed me. It is beautiful. Thank you for sharing. I'm looking forward to hearing more of your stuff. Really loved the melody and you have a great voice!

Nice work!

Blessings,
Rachel

Permalink Reply by Matt Allison on January 10, 2010 at 7:23pm

Thanks Rachel.

I have to admit I can't take credit for the lead vocals. That was my mate Steve, who is a worship leader at our church. I'm on harmonies and backing vocals.

See ya!

Matt

Permalink Reply by Alex Morris on January 12, 2010 at 7:43pm

I like this a lot, especially the use of the minor key.
By any chance is Pink Floyd one of your musical influences...?

One thing that might make the bridge a bit more singable would be to eliminate a couple of words that don't appear to be adding much to the song anyway.
Perhaps
"You're the King of Justice
Who came from heaven to save us all"

could be shortened to
"You're the King of Justice who came to save us all"

and
"You're the All Powerful One
To whom we lift up on high"

could be shortened to
"You're the All-Powerful One we lift up on high"

Just a thought.
Sometimes the difference between "crowdedness" and "singability" is only a matter of a couple of syllables.
But all in all I like this song a lot...

Permalink Reply by Paul Hewgill on January 12, 2010 at 9:57pm

Hey Matt, great work! I like the "anthemic" feel. It's majestic and powerful. Very singable and memorable. I agree with the comments on the bridge, although I was ok with the first half of the bridge, but the second was too rushed.
Nice.
Paul

Permalink Reply by Matt Allison on January 14, 2010 at 7:55pm

Thanks guys for all your input and suggestions. I'm glad you like it and appreciate your kind words. Cutting out some of those bridge words will probably be the answer. The thing is those words have been like that for a long time so when I try to think of something different to make them fit, the new words sound wrong. So will see what I can do and repost it so people with fresh ears can give me their opinion.

Yes, I do like Pink Floyd. I don't think they influenced me directly in this, but I do like big textures and atmospheric sounds, so that is probably partly where I get it from.

Thanks again.

Matt

Permalink Reply by Nathan Bush on January 21, 2010 at 7:00pm

Dear Matt. This song is enjoyable! The sound is so full! The drums are fine. I would agree about shortening the bridge wording. The lead solo is nice and strong but not over-powering. If anything, the chorus could be stronger. The notes get a little low, where "normally" choruses are "bigger." Overall it was well done. Thank you.

Permalink Reply by Matt Allison on January 25, 2010 at 9:18pm

Hi Nathan. Thanks for your comments. I know what you mean about choruses usually going higher (bigger) for worship songs. Firstly I think I wrote it just thinking about my own vocal range, which tends to be a little lower (baritone but can stretch up to some higher notes if I try). I also think I was looking for the melodic hook, which I think I got in the chorus. I was always well aware of it sounding a bit "downbeat", but I also thought that so long as the texture is strong and majestic, it would lift up the melody even though it goes down. I don't know if you have any further thoughts on this? I totally see what you're saying. I think that my own personal taste comes into this composition. I don't necessarily see "minor and low" as just sad, and "major and high" as just happy from a musical position, although some people do. Should I be seeing this more from a listener's perspective as well as a composer's?

cheers

Permalink Reply by Gary Wolfer on January 24, 2010 at 4:14am

Hi Matt:

Good Song! Good Music and words.

I particularly like the hook on the Chorus. If I was going to do this song, I would probably emphasize the bass and drums a bit more on the chorus. If you've ever heard the song "Hosanna in the Highest" by Hillsong, I'm thinking of the way that the bass line in the verse kind of drives with a syncopated beat. Something similar to that on this chorus playing against the "straightness" of the vocals could make it really POP! At least that's what I hear!

Now, how do I get this chorus out of my head? ;-) Good job.

GW

Permalink Reply by Jack Robertshaw on January 25, 2010 at 3:56pm

I'm thinking there is a Beatles influence in the structure, style and sound although the guitar lick did favor Pink Floyd as Alex stated. Good song, good listen. Maybe try removing the word "you're" from the bridge lines, except in the following two lines "You’re the King of Justice who came from heaven to save us all". In this line I would consider removing the "from heaven", since we know where our savior resides. "You’re the All Powerful One to whom we lift up on high". Consider "almighty" for "all powerful" and removing the "to". It's only two syllables but it makes a big difference. Weather you change the lyrics or not; I would listen to the song again, it's good as is.

Permalink Reply by Matt Allison on January 25, 2010 at 9:31pm

Thanks Jack. Definitely will be omitting some of those words. I'll re-post when my singer's able to record with me again. Hope the chorus isn't annoying you while stuck in your head! That's the worst! Cheers

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