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Permalink Reply by Charles Wolff on January 31, 2012 at 1:53pm

Overall this is nice and well performed / recorded for a G'n'G version.  Take 13, huh?  Kudos for keeping at it 'til you've got one you're happy with :-)  A few suggestions, what I'd do differently if it was my song :-)

Okay, so one of my pet peeves is songs that switch back and forth between referring to God as "You" and "He" even though it seems like most of the hot new worship songs lately do this... anyway, one suggestion would be to do a little rewording to make it consistent... "God, You give me just what I need..." "Lord, You will be my shelter" and so on. 
Lord, You are my light..."

Chorus, instead of emphasizing "I" by holding it out, try singing it so that "wait" is held out (or even "You" but I think "wait" is the word to emphasize).

I get the connection between the verses and the chorus, but you might play with the bridge a little to strengthen this connection - instead of just "what shall I fear?" something about how the singer trusts that "waiting on God" is the right answer - "I know you will appear" or something.

Music seems kinda "easy listening" in comparison to all the difficulties the singer is apparently going through... if the singer is being deserted by all his friends, I'd like to feel that a little more in the music, even though he has faith that God will take care of him in the long run.

Permalink Reply by Doug Lane on January 31, 2012 at 8:28pm

I'll be uploading a revised version shortly that addresses many of the issues you raised (thanks to another reviewer on a different site).  The Chorus and Bridge are the last and first lines (respectively) of Psalm 27, on which the song was based.

I decided to keep the perspective shift in the prechorus ("by the God who gives me just what I need") for now, but made those kinds of changes throughout the rest of the song.

Easy listening?  Maybe.  I was going for "pained, but hopeful"!  :-)

In all seriousness, the voicing and feel preceeded the song by 3 years, and the chorus is all I had until a month ago.

Permalink Reply by Doug Lane on January 31, 2012 at 8:32pm

Wait (Psalm 27)

Words and Music by

Doug Lane

 

Emaj7                    A2

Fear and doubt surround me, consume me

Emaj7                    A2

My confidence is shaken

Emaj7                    A2

Help weary eyes to seek You, see You

Emaj7                    A2

You’ve always been there for me

Bsus                       A2

I have never been abandoned

Bsus                       A2

By the God who gives me just what I need

 

                Emaj7                    A2

I will wait on You

                Emaj7                    A2

Wait on You

                Emaj7                    A2

I will wait on You

                Emaj7                    A2

Wait on You

 

Though others may forsake me, leave me

Lord, you will be my shelter

All my days You’ve numbered, You know them

I’m not a stranger to your gaze

I will never been abandoned

By the God who gives me just what I need

 

                B             C#m       A

If You are my light

                                E              Esus       E

Of what shall I be afraid?

B             C#m       A

And if You are my strength

                                E             

Then what shall I fear?

                Esus       E

What shall I fear?

Attachments:

• Wait (Psalm 27).mp3, 3.3 MB

Permalink Reply by Rick Gregory on January 31, 2012 at 10:41pm

Hi Doug,

 

like the song. We really can't go wrong when we delve into the Psalms can we. Great words that reach right from where we are to the throne of our God. Would love to hear a full arrangement of this song, full band etc... lots of potential. I think this song could easily work as easy listener or beefed up a bit. Good work