The Well of My Life

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Permalink Reply by Shaun Walker on April 8, 2011 at 1:21pm

Anyone here? Anyone?

Permalink Reply by Patti Black on April 10, 2011 at 1:41am

I recently wrote a song about the Living Water too, so I had to check this out.  Love the lyrics!  I thought I could faintly hear some keys in the background, and I wonder if you could make more use of them to add a "watery" flowing quality to go along with the pronounced rhythm of the guitar, bass and drums . . .

Permalink Reply by Simon Warner on April 24, 2011 at 9:59pm

Hi Shaun,

My initial thoughts are that I like the last few lines of your chorus ans refrain: " Jesus, You're the well of my life." I think that works well. May it be worth doing a second verse, being that the chorus is longer? The other thing I noticed was at the end of the verse is "setting me free, eternally." The "eternally" doesn't seem to sit well with me, not sure why. But to me, it seems like you could simply repeat "setting me free," rather than using "eternally," it just doesn't seem to quite fit.

On the upside, liked the recording, sounded good!

Love in Christ

Si

Permalink Reply by Charles Wolff on May 2, 2011 at 3:37pm

A couple thoughts -

 

Since, for most of the song, Jesus is referred to as "you," that line in the first part, "the life of Jesus living and flowing in me" seems slightly miscast - make it "your life, Jesus, living..." just for consistency.

 

The "well" image seems a little mismanaged, as well.  There are references to the well being "inside of me," and other references to the well being in Jesus, that the singer drinks from.  I think the latter image is more scriptural, so you might take a look at some of the lines ("in the belly of my soul" didn't sit well with me anyway) and just make everything consistent in terms of where this "well" exists.  That whole second verse might want reworking to make it more clear that the singer is drinking from Jesus the well, and that while the water is now inside the singer, the well is still external.

 

Didn't listen to the music, so can't comment on that.