Oh Lord, Won't You Help Me

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Permalink Reply by William Doney on April 19, 2012 at 2:02pm

hey Keith, thanks for sharing.  very country-ish sounding :)  good, solid lyrics for people to sing and cry out to God, possibly at an altar call or communion time?   but since you posted asking for feedback, i'll throw in my 2 cents.  hopefully it'll encourage you as you continue to write and glorify the Father.  i like to look at lyrics in a progression, each verse us further along.  something to think about/consider, is switching verses 2 & 3.  so you'll be asking to see the light, THEN ask to stand up strong (maybe as a result of seeing the light)?   only other thought is having a bridge that thanks the Lord FOR helping, or for knowing that the Lord WILL help you in time?  again, just my 2 cents..  :)  thanks again for sharing. - bill

Permalink Reply by Keith Amano on May 8, 2012 at 6:15pm

Hey Bill - thanks for those suggestions!  I'll play with that.  Yeah, I was trying to write something countryish for our bluegrass gospel band to try.  I don't think I have the right voice for it but needed to demo it anyway.  I see what you mean about the progression - I was actually thinking about leading up to the light but I see what you mean going the other way.  Thanks!

Aloha

Keith