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My Country By Jack Robertshaw
I need some help cleaning this song up. There are some rough transitions and it is long. Also; the addition of some other voices and instruments might be needed. Please let me know your thoughts. Anyway here it is.
My Country
My Country tis of thee
Where have you gone to be
My veins run red for you
but you only bleed the blue
We long for seasons past
Before our hopes were dashed
Sweet land of liberty
Where have you gone to be
Land where our fathers died
our leaders laugh and lie
We send our sons to fight
they box them up at night
We look the other way
and let the children pay
Land of the Pilgrims pride
Has hung it's head and cried
Our fathers God to thee
is banned and not to be
and sacred freedoms flags
a charred and soiled rag
We brought God to his knee
He prays for us to see
By his guiding holy light
Long may our land be bright
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Bring back the morals we have crushed
Bring back the justice, the virtue and the valor
Bring back the flag and all it's color
Bring back the god in whom we Trust
My Country had a dream
United by one theme
That jointly we would sing
Let honest freedom ring
Please let us stand for truth
as echoed in our youth
Let music swell the breeze
With wishes such as these
My Country tis of thee
Where have you gone to be
My Country
My Country tis of thee
Where have you gone to be
My veins run red for you
but you only bleed the blue
We long for seasons past
Before our hopes were dashed
Sweet land of liberty
Where have you gone to be
Land where our fathers died
our leaders laugh and lie
We send our sons to fight
they box them up at night
We look the other way
and let the children pay
Land of the Pilgrims pride
Has hung it's head and cried
Our fathers God to thee
is banned and not to be
and sacred freedoms flags
a charred and soiled rag
We brought God to his knee
He prays for us to see
By his guiding holy light
Long may our land be bright
Cx2
Bring back the morals we have crushed
Bring back the justice, the virtue and the valor
Bring back the flag and all it's color
Bring back the god in whom we Trust
My Country had a dream
United by one theme
That jointly we would sing
Let honest freedom ring
Please let us stand for truth
as echoed in our youth
Let music swell the breeze
With wishes such as these
My Country tis of thee
Where have you gone to be
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Permalink Reply by Rob Perez on -
GREAT commentary Jack. I hear some chello's/strings swelling up in this. Totally dug this!
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Permalink Reply by Jack Robertshaw on -
I am with you on the strings. I have some software that has some virtual instruments but no Midi keyboard. I would have to place the notes individually or record notes only no chords from the synth provided.
I often wonder why every little group looking to push God further from our reach in our society seems to have a louder voice than the majority of us who believe that without him this nation will crumble. It's happend in every dominant civilization in history, they lose sight of the most basic principles that made them great and go chasing power and money at any cost. I'm just saying.
Thanks for listening. -
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Permalink Reply by David Gonzalez on -
I enjoyed the song and I enjoyed the backing speeches. Although I thought you were going to fade the speech out after the first verse. Continuing further than that was very distracting from your song (for me). I couldn't focus on the message he was speaking and the message you were singing. I would've continued the speeches in during an instrumental portion of the song. All in in all, kudos on your creativity on the lyrics, melody and music. I think you did a really good job! Very Led Zeppelin-ish!
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Permalink Reply by Tricia on -
I like this, and agree with what's been said already from Rob and David.
When you go into the chorus, the transition is rough/drawn out and the chorus itself sounds like a different song altogether - perhaps it is only b/c you seemed to speed up for the chorus?
Your last stanza is the strongest to me, really good. I thought the repeating lyric "where have you gone to be" might make better sense as "what have you come to be." That could be just me!
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Permalink Reply by Jack Robertshaw on
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I do appreciate the comments. The background commentary was an afterthought and the Gettysburg Address should definitely be shortened and limited to the first verse. I recorded each verse and the chorus sepeately and pieced them together with my Sony Acid software. The transition to the chorus is rough, I should have played into the chorus instead of splicing from the verse to the chorus. Thanks for all the comments so far. I will refine the song and repost later.
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