Forever and a Day

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Permalink Reply by Tricia Trafford on August 17, 2009 at 6:09pm

Hi Jack,

thanks for posting your song. i love the lyrics and the melody as well. i think that there is a timing issue of where you are breaking w/lyrics that needs some attention. and i hear some kind of bridge/tag/chorus that takes this song further. i can almost hear it. so work with it because I think the Holy Spirit will give you more to this song. and it will take this song to another level. i wish you the very best. i also write songs and am learning to let them evolve and go to a new level. it is exciting. thanks for sharing this song. Tricia

Permalink Reply by Jack Robertshaw on August 19, 2009 at 12:35am

Thanks for listening and taking the time to share your thoughts. I am still working on the breathing for this song, Perhaps that is creating the timing break with lyrics. Definitely will work on a bridge after verse three, just not there yet. I do like to revisit songs to see how they can be improved. I have to admit though, for some reason I tend tend to prefer changing the music, strum or picking pattern to changing lyrics. If you get a chance please check out "Eve of my destruction". I would welcome your input. Thanks again.

Permalink Reply by Scott Ivey on August 19, 2009 at 3:01pm

Nice guitar melody. Again, kind of hard to understand the words. I think part of this is the fact that you're recording on your computer. The "white noise" is a bit much throughout the recording. What program are you using? you might want to run it all through a mastering session. This should bring the quality up.

Those comments are really all about the recording quality, and you already said it's not the final cut... so, The song itself... I like. This is very poetic, which lends itself to your genre. You have a way with imagery. It's a very reassuring song. God singing to us His promises. Good job!

Permalink Reply by Jack Robertshaw on August 20, 2009 at 2:38pm

Thanks for listening. I am using the Sony Acid Music studio software and a Tascam US 122L USB audio/midi interface and one external mic. I recorded both songs with guitar and vocal on the same track (playing and singing at the same time). Maybe I should join the "recording" discussion group. Any hints or tips are welcome.

Permalink Reply by Jack Robertshaw on September 18, 2009 at 3:05pm

I think I will take this to a friend for mastering.