here's one I started a while back and have pulled it back out again.

advice, comments welcomed.

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LYRICS -  The Foot of The Cross     Doug Hupp

If the eyes of God are on the sparrow

Then how much more for you and I

To receive the gifts from the Father

Passing through the hands of Christ

There’s only one place that we can go

To the foot of the cross - The foot of the cross

At the foot of the Cross, where Jesus saves

So hold your hand and make it steady                                   
It won’t be long ‘till pain subsides                                     
The remedy is in His healing                                   
In the wounds He bore for all mankind                                             
There’s only one place that we can go

If you're waiting on a revelation                                  
Just for God to show you a sign                                              
Well in this hour of desperation                                       
He’s given all you need to find

There’s only one place that we can go

Doug I think is pretty solid for the most part. I think you'd be better off though to scrap one verse (3 is usually too many in my opinion) and add a bridge instead. That would change things up a bit and give the song some place to go. I do like that the chorus is simple, which balances out the borderline wordiness of the verses. 

If you wanted to keep your 3 verses and not do a bridge, you might consider a key change after the pre-chorus line of the 3rd verse. That could help too. Just some thoughts. Thanks for sharing!

that's a great idea Nathan.. let's see what I can come up with..

and yeah I like the chorus..

I changed it to that on-the-fly, when I was trying to play through the video recording. ;-)

There are a few "connecting words" in the first verse that don't quite connect ideas the way they should - I've made a couple substitutions here, small stuff, but for me they make this first verse make more sense:

If the eyes of God are on the sparrow
Then how much more SHALL you and I
To receive the gifts from the Father
PassED through the hands of Christ
There’s only one place that we can go

The second verse brings in this idea of someone who is sick, and it just felt like that came out of nowhere... so if you were going to scrap one verse, I would certainly recommend losing that second verse.

There are a couple other minor word changes I might make to verse 3, but instead of just saying what they are, here's a trick to try: write out the verse, but like a paragraph rather than like a poem... one long line... and then read it outloud, see if there are places where there are places where the sentence doesn't seem like it turns the corner quite right.

As with the other song, I like that this one is focused, that it has a specific thing to say and sticks to it.  Each of the verses provides a little different approach to the chorus, but they all tie together nicely.  Also, this one, it's easier to follow the rhythmic flow of the song.  And the guitar is in tune :-)

working on some of ya'lls suggestions.

I agree there were some extra words and tweaks to improve lyrically...

I like going into (what I had as the 3rd verse) now the 2nd verse

Haven't decided on dropping (what I had as 2nd verse) I kinda like the content. BUT if I do drop it, I'm undecided if I should come up with a bridge or just leave it with Chorus - Lead- Chorus end It would take the song from 3:30 to about 3 mins. ????

The eyes of God are on the sparrow
How much more SHALL you and I
Receive the gifts from the Father
Through the hands of Jesus Christ

There’s only one place that we can go

To the foot of the cross, the foot of the cross,
At the foot of the cross, where Jesus saves

Waiting on a revelation                                  
Just for God to show a sign                                              
In this hour of desperation                                       
He’s given all we need to find

There’s only one place that we can go

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